Author – Dan Lawton
Genre – Crime, Mystery, Suspense, Thriller
Rating 3 stars out of 5 Posted 4/25/16
There are three primary characters in Operation Salazar: Marco Salazar, his uncle, Big Sal, and Marco's best friend Antonio Esposito. None are criminals until Marco's dad, Bartolo is imprisoned for a crime he claims he didn't commit. Then their lives change forever.
The pace of the plot is fast and exciting, but at times it stretched credibility and felt contrived in order to keep the story going.
Character development is good but the constant use of worn out clichés got tiring.
There are surprises galore among the twist and turns as police get involved with the victims of a home invasion that evolves into the very basis for the whole story. That led to conflict between the home owners and the emotional damage inflicted on the couple by the actions of the Salazars who are focused only on freeing Bartolo from prison.
The ending was a complete surprise and exposed Bartolo for what he truly was.
Then there's the bad news. Editing is abysmal. There are far too many word errors including missing, extra, misspelled and words used incorrectly.
The writing style is extremely wordy, clunky and repetitive.
Research is sorely lacking. At one point when Jen is out running her belly stored air as she ran. Isn't that what lungs are for? At a pawn shop, paintings by Warhol, Picasso and Van Gogh occasionally hang on the walls for sale. That's a much higher class pawn shop than the description painted it. The barrel of a revolver can't be spun, that's the cylinder.
The story is written in present tense and must be ninety percent narrative; a voice like an invisible bystander gives info dumps about everybody as if it were a stage manager directing all the characters and explains in too much detail why events are happening and what's going on in people's minds.
Continuity is lacking, as when Marco drew his pistol then drew it again a few minutes later.
The story is in dire need of two editors. The first to correct punctuation and grammar; the second to improve the creative writing aspect by editing out the superfluous words and phrases and improving sentence structure and gaping flaws in the plot itself.
I've stretched the rating to a three star because in spite of the magnitude of errors the plot did hold my interest.
This review was provided in exchange for a free book.
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