Author – Jackie Gilliland
Genre – Thriller
276 Amazon Pages
Rating 3 star out of 5 Posted 6/20/17
No. 41 - 2017
My impressions: wimpy, repetitious, unrealistic, slow, missed potential.
Anthony Jenkins – 36, construction project mgr., ex-special forces assassin.
Barry Adams – crooked police chief paid by the antagonist.
Mervyn Hilton – antagonist, head of Hilton Cosmetics.
Anthony Jenkins small firm is awarded a contract to manage the construction of a huge manufacturing/housing complex over much larger and more qualified companies. He wife Jane, benefits when her interior design company is also hired. Near the end of the project Jane overhears something that causes her death to silence her. Anthony is hidden nearby and cowers instead of trying to save the woman he supposedly adores. He then ran and hid as he tried to figure out what was happening and why Jane had been killed. I found this totally out of character for an ex-military trained special forces assassin.
It was a stroke of luck that Anthony just happened to have a large stash of cash in a safe at his home. Why would he have it there instead of in a bank? Months passed as Anthony evaded the police.
Action scenes were unrealistic as when he had been captured and severely beaten several times in a short time span and shortly thereafter moved and fought as if it hadn’t happened.
A staged phony rape scene didn’t make sense in how the targeted victim made an unrealistic move and propelled Anthony toward their antagonist watching from across the room with a gun in his hand. Yet, Anthony had time to grab a lamp from a bedside table, break the bulb (was there no shade on the lamp?) and stab the antagonist in the throat, killing him instantly. Hogwash. There are several other scenes just as unbelievable.
The editing is poor with errors of missing, misspelled, extra and wrong words and comma issues. Sentence structure is okay.
Character development is good for Anthony and Adams but severely lacking for the main antagonist Mervyn Hilton.
Details are sparse but mostly adequate.
The plot is interesting, but as indicated above, I was dissatisfied with the protagonist role. He was wimpy for much too long. And then in the final action scenes his previous military training didn’t come to the forefront. He was always looking for something to use as a weapon when his hands should have been lethal weapons for one on one confrontations.
Formatting was poor in that there were few line brakes to indicate scene changes. Also, internal thoughts are mixed with other narrative and poorly identified as thoughts.
The last five percent felt contrived and ended abruptly as if the author was in a hurry to quit.
I actually wanted to give this story a 4.0 rating, but in writing the review I had to be realistic and deal with its many faults. In the end, I struggled to even keep it at a 3.0.
This review was provided in exchange for a free book.
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