Author – Von Yugen
Genre – Action/Adventure, YA, Science Fiction
407 Amazon Pages
Rating 3 stars out of 5 Posted 2/4/17
Dr. George Harrison, a computer scientist.
George’s son Alex.
This story is listed at Amazon as Action/Adventure and Young Adult, but it definitely depends heavily on Science Fiction.
Dr. Harrison has invented a micro-computer chip that when inserted into a person’s brain lets humans communicate with each other over the internet. Everything that is recorded anyplace on the internet, including past phone conversations, is accessible to the small group of twelve participants.
Half of the story revolves around the history and induction of the ten other group members besides the Harrisons. Six of the members are giving and caring, and the other six are greedy and selfish. These opposing forces provide much conflict among the twelve characters plus several others. All of these characters are described and developed in great detail.
There are lots of action scenes. Fifteen-year-old Alex takes mind control of a jetliner full of passengers, overrides the control system and makes the plane do a barrel roll, much to the consternation of the other passengers.
The bad guys: mercenaries, wealthy people and government forces chase the good guys, but one of the group has weapons to rival any army.
A wealthy trillionaire with tons and tons of gold and other priceless collections has an underground fortress unknown to the rest of mankind and is a good guy. He learns of the group and wants to help them.
The wealthy group member also has underground accommodations 1,000 feet below the surface that no one knows about. And then there is Avalon: a refuge where hapless people are protected and live their lives in a utopia. Add to that, aliens from outer space, a giant flying worm in the sky, a several days ride across the Atlantic Ocean by a large number of people in a hot air balloon in a horrific storm and you’re in deep science fiction.
Editing needs substantial work in all areas but especially with commas and past/present tense. There are missing, extra, misspelled and wrong words used.
Many sentences require rewriting to structure them properly.
Characters are well developed.
Details are abundant in a budding fictional utopia created by the author.
The writing style is clumsy with redundant words and phrases.
Spaces to separate scene changes have often been omitted.
Dialog of different characters runs together until it’s hard to know who is speaking.
The plot is very liberal and politically correct. Big business, government and the wealthy are dealt with harshly amid rambling diatribes. Fictional examples of government cover ups are frequent.
I’m ambivalent about the story, but science fiction fans who can read over the noted errors may enjoy the futuristic plot.
This review was provided in exchange for a free book.
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